Conciseness Exercise (from Jin)

Exercise 3.2 Conciseness PAGE 111

1. We are in receipt of your expense report, but due to the face that it contains errors, we need to discuss it with you as soon as possible.



Concise one:

We need to discuss your expense report with you as soon as possible because it contains errors.

2. Per your e-mail, we are sending you the report in regard to our analysis of the Patrick Co. reengineering project.



Concise one:

We are sending the report of analysis of the Patrick Co. reengineering project to your e-mail.

3. Please be advised that as of January 10, 2006, we will no longer authorize work on the Javia account.

Concise one:

We will not authorize work on the Javia account by January 10, 2006.

3. To ensure that the optional conclusions will be drawn, it is absolutely essential for you to ensure the analysts are given any and all data that are necessary for effective completion of the analysis assigned to them to complete.



Concise one:

You have to make sure that all data are effective completion to draw the optional conclusions.